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Vivid Writing: How Do You Paint a Picture in the Mind of Your Reader? Add These 5 Things.

 

Big Word Day is a day that encourages people to use king-sized words just to impress others.

I love words. Sometimes I like big words. (And I cannot lie!)

But using big words for the sake of using big words…?

So. Dumb.

The point of writing is to connect with other people. To be understood. To shed a little light on the world. (If that’s not the point, you’re writing a diary.)

That’s why I’m always yammering on about clear writing. But even better than clear alone is clear buddied up with vivid writing in a recognizable style.

What’s “vivid writing” mean?

It means you add color and description to evoke emotion.

One way to do that is to use some detail.

Details make writing come alive. Details paint a picture in a reader’s mind. And that’s critical in Marketing, especially, where our goal is to ignite change.

So what kind of details should you pay the most attention to?

Here are 5 things I pay the most attention to for more vivid writing, packaged as a memorable, roly-poly acronym of P.A.N.D.A.

THE P.A.N.D.A. 🐼 GUIDE TO VIVID WRITING

🐼 P is for Percentages/numbers in context

No: 14% of us believe robots will eventually rule the world.
Yes: 14% of us believe robots will eventually rule the world—that’s the entire population of the state of Texas, with a few counties in Oklahoma roped in.

🐼 A is for Analogies in context

Notice in that last sentence, not “a few Oklahoma counties included” but “a few counties in Oklahoma roped in.” Because “roped in” invokes cattle, the southwest, Texas, Oklahoma. The analogy is stronger for it.

🐼 N is for Name the thing

No: Dog
Yes: A black Lab named Otter

🐼 D is for Ditch weakling verbs

And sparingly use “thinking” verbs that happen internally (like Thinks, Knows, Understands, Realizes, etc). Show, don’t tell.

This advice comes from Chuck Palahniuk (author of Fight Club):

No: “Don’t tell your reader: ‘Lisa hated Tom.'”
Yes: “During roll call, in the breath after the teacher said Tom’s name, in that moment before he could answer, right then, Lisa would whisper-shout: ‘Butt Wipe,” just as Tom was saying, ‘Here’.”

FINALLY… let’s loop back to where we started—avoiding Big Words for the Sake of Big Words:

🐼 A is for Accessible, simple language

No: Here is a hexad of cognitive content meriting distribution these septem of days.
Yes: Here are six things worth sharing this week.

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How do you make your own writing vivid?

 

Related:

Vivid writing is especially key in business-to-business writing, where software or service or solution feels less real, less tangible. Here is my take on how to make boring writing fun, from an unlikely source.

 

Filed Under: Annarchy, best writing advice, Business, Writing Tagged With: better writing, content writing, vivid writing, Writing

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  1. Sam says

    November 20, 2019 at 10:09 pm

    Please be aware that many readers, including myself have aphantasia which means an inability to visualise. Therefore highly descriptive passages are quite tedious as there is no way to build a picture in our minds.

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  2. Charles says

    November 21, 2019 at 4:51 pm

    Keep your descriptive text _brief_! Brevity is beauty. Focus on story and character.

    If you can keep the story flowing and the characters interesting, you will engage your readers. Bogging us down in useless scene description is a great way to bore us to death.

    Some great examples in pre-1960 pulp fiction, especially short stories.

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